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Review of Heartache  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of Tropical Storm  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
totally radical and bodaciouss.
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Review of The basket  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
coolio
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Review of The Accident  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great idea and imagery.
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Review of Gone  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the concept of the story but go into more detail. I


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Review of Autumn  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Kind of shorter than I wanted. But great imagery!
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Review of The Hunt  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good word choice!
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Review of War Zone  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Great imagery.
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Review of Trapped  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
nice
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really liked the concept of this story, it could be longer though. I like the way you put the dog in the story too. But some of it seem unrealistic, like if the body was only across the street why didn't the officers find her without the dog. I would have made it even longer by explaining how worried the girl's mom is and calling the coroners, setting up the crime scene and dusting for fingerprints. Who was the murderer? How was she killed? I think if the very end where they find the body was revised it would be a lot better. Also in my opinion it would sound better to name the girl in dialogue like, "We have a missing persons report for an Ashley...", it just sounds better to me. I really liked how you used the badge for his inspiration, I've never thought a badge like an inspiration just something detective flash before storming into your house.
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Review of Merry Christmas!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Rated: E | (5.0)
BOOTASTIC!!!!
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Review of A Ghost Story  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
SHE DEADDD!
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Review of The Long Journey  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Nice!
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Review of I am a murderer  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That is awesome, I've never heard of anyone using murderer in this way. It's great.
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Review of Gangsta D's Anger  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Haha, this is great. But I can't see you going off on anyone.
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Review of Strangers Again  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Its a really strong poem and I can relate to this well. I love how it ended with "never speaking a word again."
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Review of My Angel  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The best part to me was when you used words like keeper of heaven, turnkey of hell. It's really descriptive. The person who wrote this must fear God and judgement day. But this line: Your eyes offer no remorse, no sympathy, no love. Makes God seem to be very cold and unloving. It's descriptive and it's really good at making me picture judgement day.
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