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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A short poem that details how depression seems to roll in in waves to overcome all the positive things one does. I could feel the deabilitating nature of this wave like depression.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Each positive step is overcome by a negative.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Use a larger font. Make a positive statement.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
Well written and right to the point. You have caught the nature of depression.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Trying to break bad habits is never easy and this poem places us in the mind of a person trying to do just that. He really gives us the thinking of this person.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Try as hard as you can and pray for divine help as well.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Font could perhaps be one size greater.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
The real reason for this review is to wish you a great WDC anniversary.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Nice poem about dream-catchers which are devices that are supposed to catch the bad dreams and thereby protect children from those dreams.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
The spider webs woven into the hoop catch the evil dreams.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Your poem brought a smile and then a chuckle. I could imagine just the things you mentioned.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Two people in the nude lying in a snowdrift. I can see it now. It is quite vivid in my mind.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A short direct poem about loving and having it and losing it.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
More information would make it easier to completely understand.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A person entering a space and trying to describe and explain it.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
The space seems very clinical to me. Like some kind of hospital.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Being in love is seeing the world through rose coloured glasses. These ten lines all depict the best of romance and love.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
This is a great poem about how writing occurs at some times. While sometimes we have to labour over the words to weave together to finish our writing the writer of this piece acknowledges that sometimes the words just come together.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Writing is indeed magic. I do believe that God allows that magic to flow through the minds of writers. Not something they deserve but a gift. However I believe that magic however requires all our possible efforts to make it better and correct.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Great descriptive passage, I almost felt I was right there feeling the wind in my face. I notice you use spinning ( very appropriate) several times.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
The story is the storm and how it deals with the world. Well done.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
This is simply a commerical for the music of Tom Lehrer.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
It seems that Tom Lehrer is a very comedian.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Use a larger font.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
More information on this gentleman would be beneficial.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Those who feel they are unlovable need to be told they love in other simple ways. I guess warning some one that the coffee is hot is one way of expressing love.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
People in love playing a game and biding their time to her the sentiment get expressed.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I am not sure what sorrow you are speaking about but I have experienced similiar experienced standing as a silent senintal beside a grave.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Your character is well defined. While a short piece of work I found it very moving.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A story about a young man who goes to the library but gets seduced to a life of drugs by a girl he meets there.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
We get a short description of what our unnamed male character but not strong enough. The description of Jen is even more limited. I guess as limited as her clothes. Her purpose in selecting this person seems to be missing from the story.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
in second paragraph quite should be quiet
Her cat was fluffy, gray and white, and softer than down.
She stood me in the middle of her room - should say Jen stood me. I wondered how the cat did that.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
I feel it is good outline but it seems incomplete. There is a big unanswered why.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
An interesting comparison. The soul of man is compared to the banana. The soft white interior is protected the flexible outer skin. Bruising is however quite easy. I think it is a good comparison.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
War is hell. This is the story of how the fires of hell were unleashed on the world. This was before my time and I have spent much of my life doing what I could hoping it would never happen again.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A terrible time in the history of mankind. I guess war brings out the worst in all of us.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Of course an ad is going to paint a glowing picture. who would respond to an advertisement which showed the complete truth of the grit and grime of military service. It is a dirty job. however someone has to do it and I would prefer volunteers rather than people conscripted to serve.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Having spent my time in the military I realize it is not for everyone. I had good times. I also times that still make me wake with cold sweats. I can see faces of the dead. Some were good friends.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
i guess you have to take the ads with a grain of salt.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A poem of unreturned love. Four simple four line verses that cry out with hope for love from the reader.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
The writer is hoping for something to happen in his favour.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
write more. It has been a while since you posted
FINAL THOUGHTS:
The main reason for this review is to wish you a great WDC anniversary.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
You have captured a concern for the other in three simple verses. Trying to be unassuming is difficult.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Use a larger font. How you display your text affects the reader's perception.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
I did this review to remind you we are here and wish you a happy WDC anniversary.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A very simple story. I don't think the content with the killing makes it suitable for Children's stories. It needs some work to have a basis of a good story.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Two characters. A boy and his dog. There is not enough detail either in the characters or the plot.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Write more and use a larger font.x
FINAL THOUGHTS:
Take you story and start again adding more detail.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Some people travel because they want to. In the service we travel to some places we do not want to go to. Sometimes we live in unlovely places. Sometimes those places are also unfriendly. We should honor those who go.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Not all service personnel give thier lives in death. Sometimes it is not dying for one's country but just living for it.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A good description of the feeling one has when an ex persists in running one down.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Deep feelings and anger.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
The real purpose of this review is to wish you a great WDC anniversary.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
This poem says it all. I would hate to be on the receiving end of such a concise tirade of emotion and firmness.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
It's a good story as well as a good poem. For presentation I would increase the font and perhaps centre the lines.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
The real purpose of this review is to wish you a great WDC anniversary.
First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.
OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Thank you for this poem. I could hear and almost feel the horse cantering onward as I read the poem.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
The repeative lines are wonderful. There is a real feeling of a horseman and his steed coming across the fields.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
None
FINAL THOUGHTS:
The real purpose of this review is to wish you a great WDC anniversary. I enjoyed the poem.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A very short poem about a day. As time flies so does this review.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
No suggestions.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
The real purpose of this review is to take a moment to wish a great WDC anniversary.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A short poem about falling in love.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A good poem but the lines are a little abrupt and it does not flow well.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Heels instead of heals.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
Please come back and write more on writing.com Have a happy anniversary.
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