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 | Randolf the Rude-Nosed Reindeer  [13+] Or, What Really Happened On That Certain Evening Before that Winter Holiday  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: That was a cool take on the old Rudolph story. I clicked on this because the title and especially the description sounded intriguing, and I wasn’t disappointed. You jumped straight in with a couple of instructions to the readers to save them having to look up a couple of words or phrases later on (and then followed up by reminding them when the phrases were used, which was funny). I’m not sure if they were that unusual that anyone would need to look them up, so you might be insulting those readers who would consider them commonplace, but it’s lighthearted so I’m guessing no one will really take offence. The story itself was funny, not so much because of what happened (which was actually quite terrifying) but because of the way you told it. There were humorous asides and hilarious descriptions that made the readers forget that Rudolph, I mean Randolf, had just shot one of his fellow reindeer. And it didn’t end there because once he got the job of leading the sleigh, he took it upon himself to serve justice to those on the naughty list, and the entire neighbourhood while he was at it.  Suggestions: The story was well written and I only noticed one small error: The sight of Randolf's seriously deformed nose, in fact, caused Dasher drop his cards I believe there is a word missing, “caused Dasher to drop…”  Final Thoughts: I’m not sure which part to pick as my favourite line; there were so many good ones and most of them were nothing to do with the actual story, for example the cards Dasher held, two aces and three eights, if it matters, or the repetition that this was flash fiction or flash fiction. It’s not a traditional holiday story but it still fits the season, and it made me laugh. A great read!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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