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Someone Jacked Your Sleigh Open in new Window. [ASR]
Santa Claus, Santa Claus Someone jacked your sleigh.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hallo!
You responded when I asked for submissions for my Newsletter, so I thought I'd send you a review.

1. The title, brief description, cover pic and genres work. The layout makes for smooth reading.
2. What a great response to the challenge! Someone stealing Santa's sleigh *Shock2*! I tried to sing it to the tune and it fits.
3. I was hoping they got caught, though. I was disappointed they didn't.
4. I'd somehow have liked to see a verse about the reaction of reindeer / elves who might have been witnesses to this crime. Or kids, if it happened while the gifts were being delivered.
5. Also, jacking a sleigh sounds like the act of teenagers or something, but these were powerful men. So - why did they do it? What was the motive?
6. Just a small quibble - where you say 'who they hurt' maybe 'whom'?

Thanks for sharing this one!
Write 0n,
Sonali.

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