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 | A Brush With Ombeline  [E] For "What a Character" - introducing Ombeline via an inanimate object.  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: Is it odd that I felt glad the paintbrush was rescued from the trash in the end?  It was no longer needed, like the knives and forks, but it wasn’t thrown away. At least I assume that was a good thing as she caressed it before confining it to its new home, even though she knew she wouldn’t use it again. I assume that the prompt was what you said in the short description, to describe a character via an inanimate object. I read "The Small Potatoes of Ombeline Du Pine" over twenty years ago, which is scary to think about but also explains why I didn’t remember much about this character. You did a great job refreshing my memory with this tale, and I smiled when I saw Small Potatoes mentioned here. What I said back then holds true for this story as well. I’m not an artist but I recognise one when I see one, and you are it. You painted a very vivid picture with this story.  Suggestions: I didn’t spot any errors and I don’t have any suggestions, so I’m going to use this space to mention a couple of passages that I thought were particularly well done: Ombeline was creating a vast field of green, sown and ploughed with ten fingers If the readers had any doubt what was going on in this tale, this image was perfect to show them. The paragraph where The pot fell to the floor and smashed dramatically. I read it a couple of times and loved the descriptions and the way it changed the tone of the story.  Final Thoughts: As you can guess by now, I loved this story. I wonder if you ever finished the novel. There are only two items in the folder and nothing written for a long time. I realise you write mainly poems but if you haven’t written any more of this, you should consider picking it up again because it’s a good story that is, more importantly, very well written and a pleasure to read.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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