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Promptly 4 and 5 Open in new Window. [13+]
Poems for years 4 and 5 of the Promptly Poetry Challenge.
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Greetings, Beholden!

It's that time of the month... And you're it at least once *Bigsmile*

Yours is a classic theme, taking the form and creating something timeless and universal. So Lilli did tell us to have fun this week... I honestly thought I'd come up with that on my own *Laugh*

I think this is a good meter for extending out beyond a single verse, though perhaps it might become monotonous. If I had time, I'd experiment with crafting song lyrics with it, using the chorus and other natural shifts to add a different metric structure to keep it fresh.

Recently I stopped and counted the syllables in the opening verse of the *Think* *DragonHead* *DragonHeadB* song Gods Don't Pray, and found it's a perfect 10-8-10-8. As a lyricist, Dan Reynolds depends more on poetic meter than melisma (as Ryan Tedder does) to carry his melodies, which I find fascinating. I've always been kind of puzzled by the differences between lyrics and poetry. I like lyrics that "look" as good as they sound...

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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