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Willowsong  [ASR]
What the willow sang. A terzanelle.
by ผีKåreEngaในMontana
Review of Willowsong  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Dear ผีKåreEngaในMontana ,

I found this old poem while scrolling through the read and review pages and decide to give it a look-see. Since I'm on the clock, let's see how sharp I am tonight.

This poem uses interplay between imagination and elements of dreams to convey its message. The imagery gives me a sense of ethereal wonder, themes of longing, exploration, and an awareness, or plague, of deeper truths.

The poem’s structure and repetition hint at a dreamlike state. The narrator, and possibly protagonist, lays his head on a pillow, perhaps sleeps and dreams. The "solar winds" and the "sap rise within the willow" suggest a connection to nature and cosmos, as in dream imagery, a flight of imagination where the boundaries in of reality in this poem blur.

Your poem reflects a conscious engagement with existentialism and universal knowledge, maybe reflections that stem from deep contemplation or creative imagination. The willows metaphor has wisdom or insights about life, creation, and the knowledge that may disrupt happiness and future existence.

I could interpret the poem to come from perspectives borne out of both imagination and dreams. It feels between subconscious and waking thought, gets into profound themes with richly woven imagery and emotion. Your interplay of these elements invites one to ponder our knowledge, existence, and burdens that come with knowing.

I had to ask myself some questions to hopefully understand more fully this complex poem. Foremost, The 'He' in the poem presumably represents a contemplative one who possibly seeks understanding of the world and existence. Rather than first person, the way I go, it feels detached from poet who may have been the one heavy with burden. The separation from self would be understandable, as we often try to get as far away from difficult subjects as possible. It nearly romanticizes with this consciousness and the imagery applied to demonstrate to reader.

This character lies in bed and dreams of what the "solar winds" might carry —perhaps a longing for exploration, adventure, and mysteries of the universe? The solar winds can symbolize unseen forces that inspire creative imagination and reflection, encouraging these personified willows to reach distant places and experiences. Could just be a poem that came from a strange dream. What did you do or eat that day? *Bigsmile*

Given a voice, willows express desire to travel (which you do) and share knowledge. However, burdened by the realization of "Creation's tears" could be pain and suffering in these struggles that more ordinary may reference His difficulties that restrain one from moving forward with life. Thus, there is a juxtaposition between the desire to seek knowledge and the sorrow that one cannot access what is desired or sought.

What is good about this poem?
1 Imagery and Symbolism: The willow and solar winds create beautiful, uniquely visual pictures. With a little research -- willows symbolize flexibility, resilience, and deep roots, while solar winds are about ideas of freedom, movement, and the mysteries of the cosmos.

2 Themes of Exploration and Sorrow: Between the joy of discovery and the burden of knowledge its emotionally impactful, with a rich and thoughtful exploration of existentialism.

3 Structure and Repetition: The refrain structure emphasized a cyclical nature of thought and dreams, which delivered this burden, and enhanced the emotional depth of your poem.

4 Personification: By giving the willows human-like qualities, you effectively convey feelings of longing and sadness, creating this connect between nature and human experience.

5 Philosophical Reflection: The poem prompts me to more deeply consider an inexperienced understanding of my world, but the cost of knowledge, and the nature of existence as I know it personally.

I have no suggestions. This was a big reading assignment tonight. Your ability to weave complex themes into a lyrical and musical structure, how it blends nature and existential inquiry, was deep. Googled a bit to be sure I had a good idea of what this is, how to approach and peak to what I felt you conveyed.

A pleasure as always,

Brian
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