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Never Really Right  [ASR]
Honest assessment of self, gleaned from a poem written at the Dew Drop Inn.
by winklett
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Greetings,

I love a good self-reflective poem, and this is one. You describe yourself with an apologetic honesty which is heartfelt and deeply relatable.

I, too, am introverted and enjoy crafts and puzzles and write the occasional moody poem, and I know how it feels to always feel the need to apologize for oneself and assume that whatever I do is not quite right or is somehow “not normal.” In fact, I’ve thought a lot about that particular issue and have only recently begun to realize how diverse the world really is and that there’s room for me in it. I would always be afraid to “be myself” around others because I assumed no one else had a similar life experience, or others had so much more money and prosperity that it would be embarrassing to admit how poor I am.

Coming to WdC for example, I assumed when I arrived that everyone here was well-off enough to never have to worry about renewing their paid memberships, and that you all have these wonderful leisurely perfect lives where you can write whatever you want whenever you want with endless resources and no distractions… I felt quite “shabby” at first in comparison. But I’ve discovered that we’re all humans with struggles and issues, some mental, some physical, some financial. WdC is a place where we all become equals in our writing and helping each other out.

If you pardon my love of music and Imagine Dragons in particular, your words remind me of many of lead singer Dan Reynolds personal introspective lyrics, especially the tracks off of 2015 album Smoke + Mirrors. In one song, Next to Me, he even says “I am a deck of cards, vice or a game of hearts…” and in Polaroid, he spends the entire song applying different labels of the literal and metaphorical sort. This raw honesty and vulnerability in songwriting is part of why I like his band so much, and I see that same earnestness in your writing here.

Improvements? I dislike telling others to tinker with their poetry, especially free verse and especially when it’s a personal piece. I’m no expert on poetic meter and form. To me your words flow well and convey their theme sincerely and with creativity and honesty. And that’s pretty much what matters most. I would suggest using Size 4 font to bring it into clearer focus on our busy WdC pages (my sidebars are humming with activity!) and also adding a third relevant genre such as “Experience” or “Drama” or “Emotional.” This would help others find it when browsing.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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