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Review #4766816
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 The Jerk Who Walks Through Walls  [18+]
an author talks to one of her creations
by Lani
Review by Pol-TIGGY-st
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

And I thought I’m strange because I talk to my characters! After they take up residence in my head and make themselves at home, I frequently have conversations with them about the story, or about other things when they just offer their opinions uninvited. I’ve never had them appear quite like Peter does in this story though. It was an interesting concept, the way he challenged the writer and demanded a better part in the story. I liked the way she humoured him and offered him a couple of happier endings to choose from. I’m sure the story was better for it!

He was very well drawn, the way he dressed and talked, and it was easy to imagine him barging him. The writer wasn’t as shocked as I would have imagined her to be, considering that this seemed to be the first time she had one of those conversations with a character. She asked some interesting questions though and was surprised to find that with every story (and poem) she wrote, she created a whole world.


*PenG* Suggestions:

I noticed a few small errors. I believe there might be a few commas missing to set off an introductory word or a direct address, for example here:

“Huh who are you?’
where I think there needs to be a comma after “Huh”, and

“I’m 32 genius.
where there should be a comma after “32”.

The one about the road less travel,
“travelled”?

“Now, how do I get rid you, Peter.”
There seems to be a word missing: “rid of you”. And you need a question mark instead of the period at the end as this is a question.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

I thought the idea of the ‘little worlds’ she created with each story was an intriguing concept. What happens to those worlds after the story is over? I want to write a story about that now!

I felt right at home in this story as I could identify with the writer who had a slightly crazy conversation with a fictional character who, to her, was very real. Tell this to someone who is not a writer and they’ll look at you strangely, but writers will just nod their heads *Laugh* I enjoyed the read!




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