TOUR DE PORTS

Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 


Hello, Sebanastan aka Sebs!

Welcome to Writing.Com! I think it is a super fun and supportive community and I hope you enjoy it here.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

You wrote a powerful personal philosophy poem that I enjoyed reading.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

You engaged my emotions as I read this personal philosophy poem of yours. I appreciated your zest for life and desire to experience much during it.

I liked the many unusual elements. For example, I've never thought to compare myself to a dingo, but you did it well.

I liked the "big hill of peace" image you planted in my brain as I read the line.

My favorite line was: "So that positivity, my love, my life may shine bright" because I love positivity, love and lives shining bright. I enjoyed your good nature and hoped that you will be able to do this every day.

I didn't notice any spelling mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your personal philosophy poem.

I thought the philosophy, experience and personal genres you selected were perfect for this personal philosophy poem of yours.

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IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness (and because of the rules of the Tour de Ports review challenge I'm in require that I give at least one suggestion for improvement, I have a suggestion to make your piece stronger.

If you're interested in some constructive feedback, read on, but if you want to skip this part, no worries at all! Just know that I enjoyed your personal philosophy poem and skip on down to the next section.

The best thing I can think of to recommend do you for this poem is to not capitalize "sonder" in this line:
"For passion and for Sonder"
... Unless Sonder is a person or place that I don't know about?

I looked it up on dictionary.com and this is the gist of what they said about sonder: "noun. the feeling one has on realizing that every other individual one sees has a life as full and real as one's own, in which they are the central character."

When I was reading and saw it capitalized, it stopped me from going further for a bit because I wondered why it was capitalized. Not a big deal at all, but I wouldn't have had that pause if it had been in lower case.


CONCLUSION:
You have a great personality that shines through this personal poem of yours and I enjoyed reading it.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, welcome to Writing.Com! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!


May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler







Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .