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The Learning Tree Open in new Window. [E]
Early lessons under the Learning Tree and the resulting curse for all parents
by Amay Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

So that’s where that saying came from! It makes sense. My mother used a slightly different version, meaning the same thing: “I wish you nothing bad in life, but I hope one day, you’ll have a daughter!” Well, if I was anything like Eve, I can’t blame her. That girl was driving me crazy in just a few lines, although the repeated, “Are we there yet?” made me chuckle.

Both Adam and Eve were very well drawn and it was easy to imagine the two of them, squabbling over the name of a horse, and pretty much everything else. I liked the relationship between the Boss and Gabriel. They could discuss business matters with the Boss accepting advice and admitting that Gabriel might be right.


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was nicely written and I only noticed a few small errors:

You know their just young.
I think that was meant to say “they’re”.

The leaves above rustled above them.
You only need one “above” here - I would suggest omitting the first one.

“Eve, get down here right now.” The Boss yelled.
As he yelled this, I would replace the period with an exclamation mark.

“Boss, whose going to hire them?
“who’s” as in, “who is”.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

The story was funny (incidentally, you might want to replace the ‘other’ genre with ‘comedy’) with a great ending. The conversations between the Boss and Gabe were my favourite parts, especially the bit about the rabbits which apparently multiplied faster than expected. A good story!




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