Hello, Tinker!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

I enjoyed reading your "weekend camping" poem.

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.

You engaged my senses and emotions as I read this philosophical nature poem of yours. As someone who used to enjoy camping in the woods, I could relate to a lot of it.

You did a good job of conveying the havoc a wild bear can wreak on a campsite, and contrasted that nicely with the fact that the wilderness should be the bear's home, where she or he "can run free."

I wasn't familiar with the Sjair form you used for your poem so was glad for your detailed explanation of it.

I loved the ending, because of the contrast I mentioned above.

I didn't notice any major mistakes in your weekend camping poem.

I thought that if you hadn't been camping before, it would be astonishing, as you seemed to write this weekend camping poem from experience.

It was really nice to hear from you today. I hope you'll come back often to write and socialize with us here at Writing.Com! We miss you! I, for sure, miss you, and I know I'm not alone in that.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I just have one little suggestion. In line two, you say "Those black bear" and I think (it's probably just a typo), you meant bears? The rest of the poem seems to refer to bears as plural so it would make it feel more congruent if the first mention were also plural. I'm not an expert on bears or plurals though, and you are a far more prolific poet than I am. So, to be sure, feel free to take this suggestion or ignore it.


CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and I greatly enjoyed reading your camping in nature poem.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!


Once again, happy anniversary day and month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler













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