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 Review #4753680 |
 | INXS X  [13+] Short story collection based on the album.  |
| (4.5)| Greetings Purple Princess ! I am sending you a review of your story, "The Stairs" . I hope that you find something interesting or helpful to you. WHY I AM REVIEWING THIS: This goes along with my make-up entry during week 21 of "I Write in 2024" . TITLE: The stairs play an important part in this story, so it seems appropriate that would be the title. One small question, though. Why is "The Stairs" repeated twice at the beginning of the story? HOOK: I think your first paragraph does work well as a hook. The reader wonders if something might happen between the two people who pass each other every day on the stairs. SETTING: I was envisioning the wide stairway in an older building that had windows at the landings. CONFLICT/STORYLINE: A guy who works the nightshift, sees a gal who catches his eye every day on the stairway. He is arriving to work and she is leaving her day job. He wonders about her, worries about her, is happy when she appears happy. He doesn't have the nerve to have a conversation with her. CHARACTERS: We don't know much about the female in the story, since the main character does not know her, we don't get to know her, either. We know a bit more about the male since he is the main character. Even so, I found myself rooting for these characters. DIALOG: There isn't any dialog, since the characters never do speak to each other. POINT OF VIEW: First-person point of view limits what we can know about the characters, but it works in this story. FINAL THOUGHTS: Thank you for sharing your story.
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