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 | The Detached  [13+] There are some crimes that cannot be forgiven. (1st Place Stormy's Poetry April 2011)  |
| (5.0)| A "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Way behind!  ReviewSubject: If I understood this poem correctly, it is about being detached from humanity, easily being swayed to the dark side, for lack of a better term, and carrying out the evils without remorse because material things are what we deem as important, not life itself. Flow: This piece moved pretty well, though I did get hung up in the middle. That could just be me. Description: This unfolded like a gripping tale and pulled me in right from the beginning. The highlighted words added to the eeriness of this piece as evil and dark shadowy figures come out to do their bidding. Rancid, fetid breath, now that really stood out and cause me to turn up my nose, as if I could actually smell it. You do so well with imagery in your writing. Overall Impression: This is like a ritual continually carried out, pouncing on those in grief or turmoil because they are already in a state of despair. I'm still pondering the detachment because I see it every day in life as the world seems to be ruled by it. No common courtesy or morals; just live your life and forget about the consequences of your actions. Anything that I read that keeps me thinking about it long after is always a good sign in my book. The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  
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