"Game of Thrones"  "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 



Hi Gaby,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Hello Kitty!

First Impression: That cat conned the author big time into a warm house for her babies. I know how adorable kittens are, they're hard to let go of when relocating them. I don't know if you know but Momma Cats don't have litters that large. 1-9 can happen but typically it is 4-6. I realize you're going for the comedic affect.

What needs your attention:
1.I hoped the raccoons weren't digging through my trash again. I believe racoons aren't digging through

"Two weeks later, the furry little creatures didn't budge an inch. If anything, their bad behavior escalated. I was determined to find a solution for it!"

The wording of these two sentences is wordy. May I suggest. Two weeks later, the furry little creatures behavior had escalated. I was determined to find a solution.

Tells the reader the same thing without all the extra wording.

What part I liked best: Foxy coming to the door and moving right into the place like she owned it. We had a cat named Quizmo that came to our door, moved in for about 6 months and then vanished again. I think he wanted a warm place to call home for the winter.

Overall impression: The short story was cute but there are some wordy sections that could be tightened up to improve the pacing of the story.

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What does the Fox say????? going for those points, girl


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