I was looking for static items to review and came across this short story in the browse by type section of the. The image of the bear you were using made this article stand out from the others. It was a fun story to read through. The tagline of the article is also a great hook as it definitely entices prospective readers to check this story out. It deals with the unexpected situation of a bear making its way into a campsite.

I like the style of the story. The story is told in such a realistic way that I'm unsure if it is based on actual story or if it is completely fictional. There are some nice comedic beats to it which are timed very well. Right at the beginning I chuckled when the nicknames of the scout leaders where discussed. I can't figure out why Schwartzenberger wasn't granted a nickname when he is probably the one that would benefit from it the most.

The description in the story is very good. It is clear what is happened and even technical exposition moments like the the scouts setting up a rake is told with enough clarity to follow what is going on. I wish that the segment where the actual bear showed up was expanded just a little bit further as it is the highlight of the story. I am curious as what about the bear made him seem like smokey when compared with other bears that the people might came across. The ending lines were delivered very well and feel like an amusing punchline to a joke.

I really enjoyed reading this story a lot. Thank you for sharing this story/experience with us.




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