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 | Road Less Traveled  [18+] Flash fiction inspired by the Lauren Alaina song of the same name.  |
| (4.5)| Hallo Jeff ! I will be reviewing your work "Road Less Traveled" for House Targaryen on behalf of "Game of Thrones"  Pluses: Ah, I remember this one. Back in the day (at the beginning of the month which was centuries ago), this was a prompt for one of those many gazillion challenges for GoT. Can't even remember what I wrote for this one, but the music video and the lyrics to this seem to talk about trying not to rely on short cuts to get what you want or to believe in yourself and not take too much stock in what others may think of you. Now, how do any of these relate to your story? We can all have our different interpretations of how a song inspires you, and in your case, this - where most stories I've read seems to be of the motivational kind - yours goes in the way opposite direction. S-e-x! Hah! Somehow it all boils down to that, doesn't it? In this case, our main character pulls up to work with a damaged vehicle - a result of an argument gone wrong with the ex. Typical, yes? Although it appears she damaged it just enough that it was still drivable. Impressive. Via a conversation with his co-worker, we learn about the real reason behind the remodelling project. It seems our main character got too greedy and wanted to pull a Seinfeld (aka Jerry and Elaine) after a breakup. Unfortunately, ex was too irate at the time and did not entertain the idea at all. Through the main character, you try to rationalize the decision as he launches into a monologue about the appeal of the road less travelled. Just when he seems to have arrived at a definite thought on the whole concept, he gets a message from the ex who has re-considered the proposition and is now into it. Ah, the wonders of a good night sleep, some coffee, and finally allowing the brain to digest prior events before we made our rash decisions. Dialogue heavy, I enjoyed the conversation between the characters. It gives the readers an idea of their personalities even if not much time is spent describing physical attributes. There's also a definite conclusion to this story where we are not left hanging with an unresolved conflict.   Great job with the prompt, Jeff! It was a pleasure to read. Keep on writing!    Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/16/2024 @ 2:46pm EDT