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Scrivenings of the King-Beyond-The-Wall Open in new Window. [18+]
My Game of Thrones 2024 Workbook
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         Review for entry/chapter: "Fantasy & Fairytales #5" Open in new Window.
Review by JayNaNoOhNo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Hello, Jeff!

*Checkb*Overall Impression:
This narrative poignantly captures the disillusionment of a forgotten hero grappling with his fading legacy and the harsh realities of a changed world. It skillfully intertwines themes of loyalty, abandonment, and the unyielding spirit of rebellion, delivering a compelling tale of resilience and impending retribution. Its parallels to the treatment of real-life veterans are clear.

*Checkb*Title and Description:
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*Checkb*Hook and plot:
The introduction effectively establishes a tone of melancholy and nostalgia, quickly engaging the reader with the protagonist's plight. The plot unfolds with a natural and logical progression from past to present, anchored by the arrival of the mysterious message. The story balances both time periods, weaving in elements of personal sacrifice and unresolved conflict.

*Checkb*Characters and dialogue:
The characters are well-rounded for a short story. The dialogue, though brief, displays the underlying emotion and a shared history, effectively setting the stage for their planned rebellion. The use of the callsign and the exchange about the "tour bus" cleverly uses metaphor to enhance the story.

*Checkb*Grammar and Mechanics:
The story is well-written, with clear language and strong word choice that enhances the reading experience. The narrative flows smoothly, with well-structured sentences that support the pacing and build-up of the story. I did not notice any grammar or spelling errors.

*Checkb*Final Thoughts:
This is a tale that entertains and invites reflection on the costs of war and the value of personal sacrifice for a cause. It's a poignant reminder of the complexities of heroism in a changing universe.

Thank you for sharing your work with us!

JayNaNoOhNo Author Icon*Smile*



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