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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Creeper Of The Realm

"Game of Thrones"  Hello fellow writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes. Title: The Whispering WillowFirst Impression: The idea of a willow tree drew me in to read this piece. This is a lovely, serene, gentle story full of the magic of hope and love. What a wonderful method of teaching. Write about a curious child listening to an ancient tree which in turn weaves a spell about a star and a sad little girl. A child could empathize with this. I envision beautiful illustrations accompanying this tale. You painted them with your imagery.          What needs your attention: Nothing. I cannot see any need for corrections, or editing.What part I liked best: As I mentioned your rich imagery conjures up wonderful pictures. Imagine a sprawling, leafy, humongous willow tree. I can see the curious, open to learning child with the "wild curls and eyes like dew-kissed petals." A glimmering star visiting a lonely, sad girl in a garden presents a colourful spectacle/scene. I like the idea of compassion and the art of listening being described as " starlight". These are indeed magical properties. My favourite lines: "She whispered hope into her dreams, and Elara's heart bloomed like a forgotten flower. They laughed under moonbeams , and Althea's light grew brighter." "Pain carves space for love." Eloquent, evocative, inspiring. Enchanting wording. The final sentence is also beautiful. "Even in loss there exists there exists magic--the kind that binds stars to souls and whispers across centuries."Overall Impression: This is a fantastic, heartfelt children's story. If it were in print, I'd purchase it for my granddaughters. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure! What does the fox say??? Listen carefully. (1853 characters) DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.