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 Girl's Write Out Open in new Window. [13+]
Dealing with a muse
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*Reading* THE STORY

Lena needs her muse to focus on poetry and not gussing her up.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the character voice. Chloe came across a flighty must with determination to do the right thing by her writer and Lena came across as a determined writer wanting to find balance with Chloe.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the first person by Lena. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.

*Star* DIALOGUE

There's a good blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "dress in something that actually flatters you, and discover a hairstyle. Geez, Lena!" We get a great visual of Lena using a good economy of words.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day?
PLACE: not sure? A Writer's house?

This is something that isn't necessarily clarified for the reader, but I don't think it needs to be. The piece is a vinyette is more focused on comedic bets.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Lena

She's a writer, but she needs her muse to play along. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of spacing here on WDC to make it easier on the reader's eyes. The vinyette is easy to read.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I liked the title a lot and I thought it captured the essence of the quirkiness between Chloe and Lena. The opening engages the reader in a nice conversational tone. A comedic read that make one think on a slightly deeper level.

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Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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