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White Balloons Open in new Window. [ASR]
I passed by a cemetery today...
by Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ Author Icon
Review of White Balloons  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello Ẃeβ࿚ẂỉԎḈĥ! This review is given on behalf of "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window..

*Reading* I've faced several deaths in my life, but the loss of a child is on a whole different level. Kids aren't supposed to die before their parents or grandparents. The pain of losing my grandchild a couple of years ago is a feeling that I don't think will ever fade. A child has too much promise of what they can achieve in their lives. My grandson craved living life. He couldn't wait to have all sorts of 'grown-up' experiences. I'm just glad his parents did so much with him and their family while he was growing up. One just never knows.

Some in the crowd hold umbrellas, waiting for rain. I always thought it most agreeable that it rained on the day of a loved one's funeral. Heaven is crying with us. It rained on my husband's and grandchild's day of burial.

Your poem is free-style, and this works well for this poem. The images are stark and sad. The black clothes and the dark clouds are a nice contrast with the white balloons. I could easily see the crowd holding the balloons in mourning, and the little girl hugging onto her mother's waist.

I started releasing a balloon to my loved ones on their birthday, many, many years ago. I'd write a message I wanted to say to them and let it go. There's something beautiful in watching it rise until it's no longer in sight.

If one does release balloons for their loved ones, I do hope they cut the nylon string off so it doesn't get wrapped around wildlife.

Thank you for sharing this beautiful, yet sad writing with us. Your words portray a lot of emotion. Good job. *Smile*

*Heart* Tracey

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