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Hi Zeke,

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Her First Time

First Impression: I wondered why the warning about don't jump to conclusions but once I read it I started laughing. I know I'm not alone in where my mind went with that title. Good one.

What needs your attention: Nothing, I didn't note any punctuation or grammar errors.

What part I liked best: The girl being assured that it won't take long. I've had a couple dentists tell me that too and that wasn't the case. It's hit or miss on that one.
I don't about you but my first extractions were wisdom teeth and he did it with Novocain unlike today's sleeping gas or in the hospital. My jaw ached for days after that.

Overall impression: The author presented a short story to the reader with a teasing headline and a warning in the subtext that invited the reader into a surprising story about a girls' first tooth extraction. The pacing was good and held my interest from beginning to end. Especially the ending when I was laughing at myself for how quickly my overactive imagination wandered.

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What does the Fox say????? Nicely done, Zeke.


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