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 The Town Watcher Open in new Window. [E]
Millicent has the time and the inclination to keep an eye on things.
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*Reading* THE STORY

Millicent is a tad older, not much to do, so she heads to the stone bench to watch the busy town around her.

*Smile* WHAT I LIKED

I liked the characterization. Millicent is quite a character with her own quirky ways, but aren't we all a little quirky?

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the third person omniscient. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately.


*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

There's enough to set the scenes. I liked: "Millicent unpacked her cavernous tote bag, the one with all the handy pockets." The author uses a good economy of words to paint a great visual in my imagination. I pictured an older lady, a little bored, with a tote bag so big you could put just about anything in it.

*Star* SETTING

TIME: modern day
PLACE: local town

This is something that that is clarified for the reader. I pictured a mid size town where everybody just about knows everybody. It makes the story more personal.

*Star* CHARACTERS

Millicent

She's a people watcher. Nothing wrong with that, but sometimes you might see stuff you don't want to see. *Thumbsup*

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The title fits the story. The opening had me hooked with it's comedic beat. Nice conversational character voice. This is a story that will make the reader smile at the end.

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