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 | In Dreams  [18+] Sleep eludes Matt, while snow falls and his wife and best friend argue downstairs.  |
| Hallo Max Griffin 🏳️🌈 ! I will be reviewing your work "In Dreams" on behalf of "House Targaryen Points" for "Game of Thrones"  Content: This is a short story that delves into the troubled thoughts of a young man who seems at a crossroads. His best friend and wife do not seem to see eye to eye over something and yet our protagonist seems powerless to stop it. Why? Pluses:Ooh, delightfully creepy conclusion! As that famous meme goes - 'you almost had us there in the first half'  But then again, as you read on, the questions start piling on as somethings don't quite add up. Your use of imagery in this story was excellent. One is able to feel the heat of that room with your apt choice of words to describe the way Matt felt at the time. Then we are allowed to drift back through the memory banks as he recalls how he and his wife met, their courtship and then marriage. It all seems so romantic and idyllic, and yet there's an ominous tone beneath it all for some reason (or maybe I just can't find happiness in the little things. Hah!) My hunches are proven right however, as the odd situation with the best friend is 'resolved' and his wife comes back to the bedroom. First...why was she arguing with his best friend? Why wasn't he down there to keep the peace if they were not seeing eye to eye? Why leave them both alone downstairs and he be stuck in a sweltering bedroom? Was his wife involved in a tryst with his friend? If so, Matt's being pretty cool about the whole situation, isn't he? So, that idea was crossed off my list. Then came the idea that ol' Matt was actually not even with us 'in person', that he was merely a ghost reliving the good times and was stuck in the room because that was where he felt the most kinship with his wife. Definitely did not expect that it was the wife behind the deed in the first place. And why though? That's the puzzling bit. Did Matt cheat? Or was she just vindictive from the get go? I am going to need some explanations about that one.    All around, a very well-crafted dark story with a twist that should have the readers gasping in surprise. Thanks for sharing this piece, and keep on writing!   Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You last responded to this review 04/14/2024 @ 9:40pm EDT