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The Iron Bank of Braavos  (13+) For G.o.T. Activity #1994693 by Creeper Of The Realm

"Game of Thrones"  Hello Fellow Writer! My name is Sandra. I am one of the sly foxes.Title: Sing on Birdfirst Impression: Who doesn't appreciate Spring and not associate bird song with its arrival? I like the rhyme in your poem. It flows nicely when read aloud. I am waiting for its imminent and anticipated arrival.What needs your attention: "I sure hope theyre right." It should be "they're right." The final line contains a strange word. I realize when some people speak 'have to' sounds like 'haft to'. I believe it should be in italics or quotation marks to signify it is a colloquialism. Is it meant to be one? If not... I researched 'haft' and it is something. It is the handle of a knife. I learned something new. I do not think a knife handle has anything to do with the imagery in this poem?What part I liked best: I like the easy, flowing rhyme in this poetry. Each stanza is a three line sentence and I like this, too. The tone is one of happiness, awe, and anticipation. It kind of rolls when read aloud. It is a shame that 'out' and 'blue' do not rhyme as the other word pairings do. The third stanza is my favourite. Overall Impression: This is a joyous ode to the wondrous arrival of Spring. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure. What does the fox say??? Listen carefully.(1410 characters) DISCLAIMER: The views and opinions in this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.