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Still too fast paced. there needs to be more character development they are all equally frantic without giving one clue about why they would be. so they're spies. if they really are spies they can not afford to be as frantic as they are being. there needs to be more to their character than that sense of impending doom and inability to sit still for two seconds. the thing about the cacao that seems out of place like a product placement commercial if it really was an issue of the character not having it he should have showed frustration that morning as he was getting ready that he didn't have it rather than an infodump three hours later about it.
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