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 Securely Calloused Open in new Window. [E]
When you get tired of the hurt of losing people you love, a wall goes up.
by Lindsay Fuentes Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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A "Game of Thrones"  Open in new Window. by Gaby Author Icon Review

Subject: This poem concerns a severely broken heart. This author showcases the emotional aspects of what loss feels like. They also convey what, in turn, that kind of loss can drive a person to do when the feeling is all-encompassing. Physical and emotional suffering converge, creating paths to follow that sometimes lead to more tragedy.

Flow: The second stanza had perfect rhythm and flow.

Structure: I liked the form you laid out and the centering of the poem on the page, which made it an easy read.

Overall Impression: You conveyed the heartache, tragedy, and loss well. One loss is difficult to get through; multiple losses leave one shattered, trying to pick up the pieces and feeling cut off from the rest of the outside world. If this is based on true events, then I am truly sorry that you have had to experience this kind of heartbreak and trauma. I am thankful that you are willing and able to put that into meaningful poetry that speaks to me.

Final Thoughts: The heart is fragile, and I understand the compulsion to close yourself off from the rest of the world, protecting your heart and keeping emotions tucked away. Personally, depression, anxiety, and loss are things I try not to dwell on. I am one of those people constantly picking myself up putting one foot in front of the other, and forcing myself to think of other things. This also leads to issues as sometimes all those bottled-up emotions just come flooding out like the gates of a dam were just opened. This reminds us that we all cope differently; there's nothing wrong with that. However, self-harm is scary. Thank you for taking the time and showcasing your poetic talents. You made an emotional connection to your reader.




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