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 | A Bit of Doggerel  [ASR] A woman is walking her car when a dog pulls up behind her. Wait, what?  |
| (4.5)| The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. This is being reviewed for
  I chose the items the 3 new GoT participants will be reviewing and when I read your description of this, I knew we had to read it.  Great description, pulling me in immediately!  For your genres, you did a better job here, but don't use Contest Entry. No one searches for Contest Entry when looking for stuff to read and it's not a Quills category, so it's basically a throw-away genre. Honestly, I'm not even 100% sure why we have it, except it was from the earliest days of WdC before he had all the sophisticated tracking to see who was doing what where and why. Not to mention, Quills didn't exist, not that SM would have not let us have Contest Entry because of "The Quills" . Anyway, I'll read and see if I can suggest another...assuming I remember to by the end. I tend to read and review at the same time, then when I'm done, I'm done.  I see you put this in your Writer's Cramp Poems folder. You must enter that contest a LOT! Good job!You found the rhyme Chevrolet? Wow! I wonder if you found that word first or if you picked Chevrolet to match May, which I would find impressive...unless it's listed on those rhyming websites, then it's less impressive.  He's got great eyes and she knows to be careful. Yep, nice eyes can suck you in!  Good job, lady! Dogs can be remarkably good judges of character, though not always, of course. But when I was in college, our priest had a German shepherd that had failed police dog training. There was 1 guy that dog couldn't stand, like he would growl at the guy. The priest and I always wondered if it was something about the guy (not that we could tell) or if maybe the guy simply reminded the dog of someone else, like maybe the guy in the big, fluffy outfit that the dog had to attack over and over. No idea, but I never saw the guy on the front page of the paper, so that's good. The fact that the dog jumped into the guy's car is hilarious! Though I had that happen once and I was NOT happy. It was a rental and I'd signed a thing specifically saying I wouldn't have pets inside and worse, the dog's feet were muddy!  Yeah, I had to work hard after that. But in my defense, what rental car thinks it's a good idea to have TAN seats? I prefer black in my own, regardless of the heat.  Okay, cute ending, but it does leave me wondering about the description now. Yes, it lured me in, as it should. But now I feel a bit duped. I expecting more nonsense or absurdity. I would consider changing that, personally, just because it doesn't lead to appropriate reader expectations, IMO. As for the other genre to use, I'd suggest Pets. But you can also probably go with Children's, if you want, IMO.  Remember that my opinions are just my opinions. Take what you agree with and disregard the rest since it's your own writing.  Great poem! I enjoyed this! Thank you so much for sharing!  You're so talented!  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 04/07/2024 @ 12:37pm EDT