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 A Bit of Doggerel Open in new Window. [ASR]
A woman is walking her car when a dog pulls up behind her. Wait, what?
by Graywriter Author Icon
Review of A Bit of Doggerel  Open in new Window.
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  Open in new Window.
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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A "Game of Thrones"  Open in new Window. by Creeper Of The Realm Author Icon Review

Story: A simple dog walk turns upside down as a woman is out with her dog when a car approaches them, and parks. It seemed harmless enough, but the intention was soon revealed. A doggie-napping is in progress. The dog takes the lead by jumping into the awaiting vehicle, but this dog gets the last laugh!

Flow: This poem flowed well throughout the first stanza, and kept the metered pace throughout the poem. You didn't go for easier word choices in your rhyme scheme and instead used words that somehow made me feel it would be an almost impossible task to find something that did not interrupt the flow. Once I saw the word Chevrolet I swear I thought that was it. Great job proving me wrong!

Overall Impression: Great word choices to wrap up each stanza and keep the rhyme and rhythm going. I'm not great at poetry, but I know what goes into making these word choices that keep the rhythm and storyline intact.

Final Thoughts: The first stanza is an attention grabber, pulling the reader into the unfolding adventure. You made it easy to follow along with the story being laid out. I did not find that word choices slowed the pace of this piece. You definitely have a natural grasp of poetry and storytelling. You made it easy to picture the scene as it unfolded, as well as the events that happened during their walk. The second to last stanza made me laugh. I cannot say for sure if this pup was a little thing, or a big dog, but in my mind, she was on the smaller side, chasing a grown man up into tree. This was a fun read and I appreciate you sharing.


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