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 | Better bring a gun  [13+] Brief description  |
| (5.0)| Hello! I found your poem on Read & Review. I'm with the "The WDC Angel Army" I enjoyed reading it and I hope you find this feedback useful."The Iron Bank of Braavos" "Game of Thrones"   My impression of this piece: When I read the poem, it brings terror but I understood it. The poem sounds like it belongs to people who do bad things in the world. I thought about my own life and where life was taking me. I feel there is a spiritual battle going on but I know we can't see it. The writer could be going through something in their life. My opinion, I don't write anything like this but it does give me the chills down my spine, when I read it. You made me jump because I didn't expect this poem. Grammar and Spelling: I didn't see any errors in the poem. Suggestions: When you write poem, you need to put commas and periods because the reader will know where the poem starts and stops. When I do write poems, I try to put commas and periods. Final Thoughts / Side Notes: I read this poem all the way through and I know, there is spiritual battle going on but I realize we can't see it. This poem reminds me there is something brewing but we won't know until we passed. Just by reading it, It's a scary place to be in and I wouldn't want to be in that place. Some of my family members have passed and I honestly worry about their soul. I worry about my cousin because he's going down on a road that will lead him to that place. I just need him to get right with God and I'm sorry but that poem really scares me but I also understand the meaning behind the poem, I know it's fantasy but it may be real as well. My overall impression on this is, it's something I don't write about but I find it interesting because I can see where bad people will go if they don't get their lives in order. Keep on writing and thank you for sharing. Beacon Disclaimer: The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise.
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