The Survivor of Gilligan's Island [E] This is who would have won if the Gilligan's Island crew played the Survivor Game. |
HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" Hi Maryann . I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "The Survivor of Gilligan's Island" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story. Overall Impression. I find your comparison of Gilligan's Island to Survivor inspiring. I read your Survivor story with great interest. My wife is a great follower of the show. I am not. Our standing joke is I will go read in another room so I don't make jokes about the contestants while she watches Survivor. I followed your reasoning ... at least until "Thurston would allow Lovey and the professor to vote him off." As I understand it, finding an immunity idol is not assured. Yet you wrote it as if it were. May I suggest you re-word that sentence with something like: Knowing that Thurston and Lovey would certainly vote him off, The Professor had to find an immunity idol. He was successful, thus assuring his safety. Technical and Editorial Considerations. I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing here--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. I didn't really find any issues to be noted here. My Rating. 4.5. Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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