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GAMES OF THRONES POEM REVIEW

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*Reading* THE POEM

The poem takes a look at what could be a modern plight for people who have no money and struggle without it.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poem offers several questions for the reader to ponder. What is the power of money? Why do we let people who have none live in such poverty? Can we do better as a society? Is this nature vs nuture? Very topical questions for our society to tackle.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling mistakes. I might suggest a minor edit for punctuation. There are ("") after Hold your head high which seems oddly placed. Another minor suggestion - I might suggest making the font bigger on WDC so it is easier to visually read.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

The descriptions are very "succinct," for example -- "breath a cloud of stale liquor" and "tattered clothes, clutching a fistful of dirt." The descriptions put the reader in the moment and tug on the heartstrings.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I liked this stanza:

"Broke people.
Broke-n people.
Broken."

The simple stanza invites the reader to delve into the progression of how broke people become broken. The poem is easy to read, but challenges one to take a long, hard look at life at its rawest.

Reviewed by StephB for House Targaryen

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