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 Flames Open in new Window. [ASR]
The flames of love burn... sometimes in the WRONG ways.
by Aaron D. Fish Author Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

A brief and simple poem, building upon itself to take a cliched metaphor about how powerful love can be to new levels. I like how you use the repeating phrase “In a way one would say,” which creates rhythm, flow and a buildup to the memorable climax.

As someone who dabbles loosely in poetry, I don’t have much to criticize here, especially considering it’s free verse. Your short lines balance well and draw the eye quickly down the page. I hardly know the difference between a villanelle and a sonnet, so I’m not qualified to suggest anything about meter, syllables and structure anyway *Laugh* I view poetry an a highly subjective art form, where one is free to express one’s deepest thoughts and feelings in whatever way one likes.

I always like to make basic formatting suggestions: size 4 Verdana font, and you can experiment with centered text or using a different color font to create a more engaging look. You may also want to add a line count in case you care to enter any contests. I would recommend "Rebel Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. (which can be rather weird) or "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. or "The Newbie Poetry Award" Open in new Window. or "Fox's Socks Newbie Poetry Contest" Open in new Window.… just take a good long look at each set of rules and prompts, and you might find one that strikes your fancy.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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