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An Empty Nester's Christmas Tale Open in new Window. [E]
Christmas isn't the same, but it's better when spent with my grandkids.
by Sharon Author Icon
Review by Choconut Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Sharon Author Icon

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I am reviewing your poem, "An Empty Nester's Christmas Tale" Open in new Window. in affiliation with "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Open in new Window..

Please remember any advice given is done so with the sole intention of being helpful. These are purely my opinions.


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What I liked: Everything! Oh, my word. This poem really tugged at my heartstrings. You paint such a vivd picture of your Christmases both in the past and more recently. I could feel your empty nest-ness. The emptiness of your home without your children seems so sad, and this poem is a nostalgic reflection of the life you had before.

But whilst you show us how things have changed by describing the smaller tree and the "few colored balls and a string of lights", you end by saying that, actually, Christmas is still a magical time of year.

You moved me with your descriptions of no longer having your parents to share the time with, and how your siblings are spread out across the country. I could really relate to that. My Christmas Day used to be filled with family and friends. Now, it is just my husband and me. It definitely feels a little lonely. Desptite that, I always look forward to feeling the magic of the season. Because, I agree, it is magical.

I have to ask, a red Santa astronaut? I've never heard the like, and I'm going have to look it up online now. It really made me smile. Also, the sled and the pixies in it intrigued me.


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Suggestions: Okay. I'm grasping to find anything to suggest, but I'll give this one thing. It's not a huge deal. "with decorative ornaments, each a sweet memory:" While I love the rhyming of "tree" with "memory" (very creative), the line feels like it has one beat too many. "each" is the word that steps out of line a little. If you were to ever rework this poem, I would check out that line. But, as I said, it really is me being picky.

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Parting Comments: I love how this poem begins and ends with "the magic of Christmas comes once every year." It works nicely to bookend the poem with this phrase. It reminds us what is at the heart of the poem.

I enjoyed reading your poem very much. Thank you for sharing. Happy anniversary!


Choconut

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