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 Simple Love Open in new Window. [13+]
My take on simple Love
by sindbad Author Icon
Review of Simple Love  Open in new Window.
Review by GERVIC Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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This review is part of your "A Week of Port Raid Package" from "Magical Express Delivery WagonOpen in new Window. gifted to by your Secret Valentine. May this review will inpire and encourage you.

Comparing love to chewing gum is undeniably quirky. This unconventional metaphor, although potentially divisive, succeeds in its unexpectedness. It grabs my attention and lingers in my mind, echoing the tenacious nature of love itself.

Love poetry often walks a tightrope between heartfelt expression and cliched sentimentality. Your poem strikes a commendable balance. While acknowledging the well-worn phrase ("People have said this before"), the poem's genuine enthusiasm and unfiltered declarations ("But let me repeat it," "I can't hold it in") ring true. The mention of "You can't restrain from love" further underscores its undeniable and powerful presence.

Your words in here masterfully depicts love's transformative journey. The speaker moves from seeking "pitter-patter raindrops" to being swept away by a "cyclone." This hyperbolic contrast emphasizes the unexpected intensity and overwhelming nature of the love encountered. Similarly, the transition from wanting "a little jasmine" to being "showered with flowers" signifies the abundance and generosity they experience.

Beyond grand gestures, the poem delves into the intimacy of the bond. The image of "surrounded my thoughts" paints a picture of all-encompassing love, while "held my hand in togetherness" emphasizes the physical and emotional connection. The metaphor of being an "eternal part" and having a "special place" signifies a deep sense of belonging and acceptance.

Instead of solely focusing on personal emotions, the poem acknowledges the love received. Phrases like "You've made me" and "You've given me" shift the focus towards appreciation and joy. This outward perspective adds a wholesome depth to the expression of love.

Although the piece effectively conveys the emotional intensity and joyful aspects of the relationship, a complete analysis hinges on the poem's overall structure and development. Does it explore potential challenges associated with such overwhelming love, or maintain the focus on positivity? Does it delve deeper into the metaphor, adding layers of meaning, or leave it as a playful comparison? Examining the full poem would grant a more nuanced understanding of the writer's artistic choices and the poem's enduring message.

Overall, "Simple Love" is a bold and passionate exploration of love's transformative power. Its playful language and vivid imagery effectively convey the intensity of new love and the profound connection it can create. While the poem might not resonate with everyone due to its stylistic choices, it still offers a refreshing and honest take on love, leaving a lasting impression with its emotional honesty and playful exploration of the subject. Indeed a beautiful piece worth a read. Thank you for sharing your creation to us. Write on!

Best regards,
Gervic


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