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UKRAINE Open in new Window. [E]
An Acrostic Poem for Ukraine.
by TheBusmanPoet Author Icon
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Review by Brian K Compton Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dear Poet,

I discovered your poem "Ukraine" today and wanted to offer my reaction with some feedback. This acrostic poem carries a strong message of solidarity with Ukraine in the face of external aggression. The choice of an acrostic style is noteworthy as it allows you to convey your sentiments while forming a clear and meaningful message within the structure of the poem. All italicized. Wondered the meaning of that.

The theme of unity against tyranny is evident throughout the poem. You effectively convey the resilience of the Ukrainian people and their struggle for freedom in the face of aggressive force and injustice. The poem's emotional depth and the sense of outrage towards the aggressors make convincing and considerable thoughts.

However, I do try to offer any help with something I read, if it will help. Here are three suggestions I came up with that could further improve your poem:

1. Clarity and Punctuation: The poem could benefit from improved punctuation and formatting. Commas and line breaks can help guide the reader's understanding and create pauses for emphasis. For example, "Radical megalomaniac and his enablers," might read more clearly as "Radical megalomaniac, and his enablers," which provides a slight pause for emphasis.

2. Exploration of Emotions: While the poem effectively conveys a sense of outrage and support for Ukraine, delving deeper into the emotional impact of the situation could enhance the poem's resonance. Consider exploring the personal connection or empathy you feel for the Ukrainian people to create a more heartfelt expression. There are signature moments during the war that have been reported that could serve as examples for the poem.

3. Expand on the Call to Action: The poem ends with a call for peace but could benefit from a more specific call to action or a reflection on what individuals can do to support Ukraine. Adding concrete steps or suggestions could inspire readers to take meaningful action. Even if it’s straightforward logic that could inspire support for the country and its people.

I found your acrostic "Ukraine" to be more than a puzzle to spell out a hidden word. This is a passionate expression of solidarity with a nation facing adversity. Its format adds a layer of depth to the poem, emphasizing your message. With further adjustments, you’ll find greater clarity, emotional exploration, and a more explicit call to action that could earn favorable reaction. Your poem has the raw ability to to even more powerful as tribute to the strength and resilience of the Ukrainian people.

Thank you for sharing this, allowing reaction and feedback such as mine, if it can help serve in any way.

Sincerely,

Brian
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