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 Top five goofs in my running life Open in new Window. [E]
Track fails of a hapless amateur
by Madridista Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dear Madridista Author Icon,

"Top five goofs in my running life" Open in new Window. is an engaging column that combines humor and personal experiences in the realm of amateur running. As a former column of little acclaim, I felt your piece effectively conveys the comical mishaps and challenges faced in your running journey, which would be relatable to readers who may have had their own share of athletic misadventures. I’ve had mine, too.

The column's humorous tone is one of its strongest assets. It's evident in anecdotes like mistaking porridge for race-day fuel and the "fire in the pants" scenario. These moments are amusing and resonate with anyone who has encountered unexpected and embarrassing situations during physical activities. The humor added an entertaining layer to your narrative approach and keeps readers engaged.

The writing is concise and straightforward, which works well for this type of column. The anecdotes are presented in a chronological order, which helped maintain a coherent structure and would allow readers to follow the your running journey over the years. The use of specific years for each anecdote also adds a sense of time progression.

Based on some experience as a former journalist with print, television and radio background, I’d like to suggest areas where the column could be improved:

Vivid Descriptions
While the column is humorous, it could benefit from more vivid descriptions to immerse readers in the writer's experiences. For instance, in the "porridge nightmare" scenario, describing the sensation and the surroundings in more detail could enhance the reader's connection to the story…put them there, visualize the scenario. Anticipate outcome, build a little suspense, if possible with foreshadowing.

Reflection and Takeaways
Adding a reflective element to the column could make it more insightful. After sharing each goof, the writer could briefly discuss what they learned from the experience or how it impacted their approach to running. This would provide a more rounded narrative and give readers something to take away from the column.

Engaging the Reader
To further engage readers, consider inviting them to share their own running mishaps or anecdotes in response to the column. This could foster a sense of community and interaction among readers. Not sure if you’ve tried this. Perhaps, this community doesn’t foster that kind of readership, fandom.

“Top Five Goofs Of My Running Life" is an entertaining column that shows to me it effectively combines humor and personal experiences to depict the amateur running life with its adventures. To enhance the column, consider incorporating more vivid descriptions, adding reflective elements, and encouraging reader engagement. Overall, i found it succeeds in delivering an enjoyable and relatable read for those familiar with the trials and tribulations of amateur sports.

It was a pleasure to read and comment on this rare find in this writing community. I’m thinking of my editor now, ‘Let’s run with it.’ *Laugh* All the best to you and your endeavors.

Sincerely,

Brian
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