I found your poem "heavenly angel"  on the Plug Page and gave it a look over. This poem title and it's description grabbed me, 'about someone special that makes you feel like no one else'. We could all use someone like that in our lives, the good kind.

Here I'll summarize poem, what it captured poetically and what might be improved upon considering from all angles, in hopes it will help convey this message more effectively.

Heavenly Angel

You are the beautiful heavenly angel,
with a glow, brighter than the sun,
when ever you smile,
the world lights up,
your beauty has no equal,
you're beautiful the way you are,
my beautiful heavenly angel,
my one, and only...one.



What I find Heavenly Angel attempts is to capture the essence of someone special who brings unparalleled joy and radiance to the one's life. However, it currently falls into the trap of sounding overly cliché, akin to a greeting card sentiment. To convey this message more effectively while avoiding clichés, there can be several ways to make improvements.

First, the poem's imagery and descriptions are overly familiar. Phrases like "brighter than the sun" and "the world lights up" are common and lack originality. To make the poem more engaging, the poet in you needs strive for something uniquely exressive and find fresh descriptions that evoke the reader's imagination. Pairing the right two words here and there is all it sometimes takes.

Further, it's crucial to delve deeper into what makes this person special, what wakes the poet. Rather than just stating their beauty, the poet could explore specific qualities, moments, or actions that set this person apart. Personal anecdotes or metaphors that connect the reader to the subject can be more impactful.

To avoid the greeting card tone, the poet should use subtlety and nuance. Instead of explicitly saying, "you're beautiful the way you are," show this through vivid descriptions and actions. Let the reader infer the beauty from the words and emotions conveyed.

Additionally, consider the poem's structure and rhythm. Right now, it has a sing-song quality that adds to its clichéd feel. Experiment with different line lengths, stanza structures, or rhythmic patterns to create a unique and memorable flow.

In summary, to improve "Heavenly Angel," focus on original and vivid descriptions, explore what makes the person special in more depth, use subtlety rather than direct statements, and experiment with the poem's structure and rhythm to make it stand out from clichéd sentiments and resonate more deeply with readers.

I find this poem is find how it stands if given to another. When we share with readers, we are shouting from the hilltops. It can be powerful and moving with just the right words and structure.

Hope this helps. It was a pleasure to read and lend feedback,

Brian
Super Power Reviewer


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .