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 A Fake Smile Open in new Window. [E]
A free verse poem
by Survivor48 Author Icon
Review of A Fake Smile  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dear Survivor48,

In your poem "A Fake Smile" Open in new Window. you embark on a journey to explore the theme of concealing true emotions behind a smiling facade. Through concise verses, you effectively convey the contrast between outward appearances and inner turmoil, shedding light on the complexity of human emotions.

The poem's succeeds in its ability to capture the essence of the theme. It vividly illustrates how a smile, typically associated with happiness and pleasure, can often be a mask concealing a deeper, less cheerful reality. This stark dichotomy between the external portrayal of joy and the internal turbulence beneath is poignant in a reflection of the human experience. Your poem's brevity works to this endeavor, allows it to deliver a concise message with impact. Each line contributes to the overall narrative, building on the idea that emotions, though hidden, are always present, like a simmering volcano on the verge of eruption.

However, I found there might be opportunities for improvement with this as described free verse. While brevity can be powerful, a touch more elaboration could enhance the emotional depth of the poem. For instance, delving further into specific scenarios or feelings that lead to the need for a fake smile might help readers connect more deeply with the experiences being described. Also, the poem could benefit from more vivid imagery or metaphors to evoke a stronger emotional response from readers. Expanding on the idea of "putting a leash on negative emotions" and exploring the consequences of failing to do so could add layers of complexity to the narrative.

In summary, A Fake Smile effectively demonstrated to me its theme of concealing inner turmoil behind a smiling exterior. It serves as a thought-provoking reflection on the human condition, but a bit more detail and vivid imagery is still possible to enhance its emotional impact and engagement for your readers. That's if you return to reconsider and redraft. A pleasure.

Sincerely,

Brian
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