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 |  | Poetic Tension  [13+] The eternal struggle of left brain vs right brain  |
| (5.0)| Dear Words Whirling 'Round :Nice! I like how you twist an idiom to make it you own, like 'diametrically composed' which sounds a bit neurodivergent…or it’s just me. Great read and flow to poem. Superior in word choices and how it sets a narrative tone that cannot be touched. "Poetic Tension" is thought-provoking, explores the eternal struggle between left and right brain, drawing clever and vivid metaphors to depict internal conflict. It effectively uses poetic devices and descriptive language to create a captivating read. In each verse, you employ metaphors to describe different aspects of the left brain vs. right brain struggle: 1. Math as a Vestal Virgin: The left brain's dedication to logic and rationality is metaphorically represented by "Math, a vestal virgin," highlighting its unwavering commitment to the temple of science. This personifies math, emphasizing its purity and devotion to reason. 2. Words as Streetwalkers of Discourse: In contrast, the right brain's affinity for language and creativity is depicted through the metaphor of words as "streetwalkers of discourse." This personification portrays words as flexible and adaptable, catering to the desires of those who use them.  3. Truth as a Wriggling Eel: The poem takes a philosophical turn, comparing truth to a "wriggling eel." This metaphor captures the elusive nature of truth, emphasizing how it can slip away from the grasp of conflicting norms. My life.  The use of personification gives truth a tangible quality.4. Poetry Living Between the Lines: Finally, the poem characterizes poetry as "diametrically composed" and as living "between the lines." This metaphor highlights the delicate balance poetry strikes between opposing forces, representing a harmonious coexistence of logic and creativity within the world of poetry. What I strive for…on a good day. Or, like this poem. This piece effectively portrays the internal struggle between the left and right brain as an eternal conflict, suggests that this tension is inherent to human experience, highlighting the dichotomy between our rationality and creativity. The strengths of the poem lie in its tightly constructed, descriptive language and its skillful use of metaphors to convey complex ideas concisely. It engages the reader by delving into the abstract concept of the left brain vs. right brain struggle and making it tangible to this reader through vivid imagery. I liked the style, structure, and language usage — commendable, particularly in ability to capture the essence of each facet of the ‘eternal’ conflict. The concise and focused structure of the poem allows for a quick, impactful read. If you wanted to improve this, lord knows why, you could add further context or expand metaphors to further the poem's rich depth. While the brevity is a strength, a slightly longer exploration of each metaphor could enhance the reader's understanding and engagement. Some poems are just too good to be edited or extended. "Poetic Tension" is thought-provoking, skillfully uses metaphors and descriptive language to convey the eternal struggle between the left and right brain. Its strengths lie in its concise yet vivid portrayal of this conflict, explores layers of the brain with great meaning. Five stars! What more can I say to top that/this. Thank you for once again gracing the contest with an entry and giving some great fodder to lend thoughts in a review, Brian Super Power Reviewer   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/20/2023 @ 3:07pm EDT