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 Title:- The Dance of Time Open in new Window. [E]
Time's ephemeral dance, Cherish every moment.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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This one showed up on 'Read and Review' and I'm glad it did.

The title, brief description and genres work. The verse structure and rhyme scheme bring out your message beautifully. For the layout, maybe you'd like to try some Writing ML like font, size, line-space and centering.

The poem tells of how time goes by and the various aspects of passing time. There are metaphors to compare life to a dance, which work effectively. The message is inspiring, that we must cherish every moment we have.

SUGGESTION:
You cover the passage of time in general.
I think the poem would be more thought provoking if you add that there are going to be good (easy) and bad (tough) times, and that we need to take each in our stride. Using the same 'dance' metaphor to bring out this might increase the impact of the poem.

Thank you for sharing this poem!
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