Hi there, I’m pleased to read that you’re not giving up even though this piece didn’t win the Writer’s Cramp Contest. We as writers must never give up, simply write for the joy of creating an item which wasn’t there before you penned the words.
This piece made me smile. I liked the idea of a talking cloud who wants to make the world a better place.
The format was so different to anything I’ve read previously. At first I didn’t grasp the rhythm and rhyme.
The first line A cloud of rain followed the crowd, to emerge through the sky,, endowed by the numerous sights of intelligence found on the ground. I found a little confusing. I think it was just the way it was phrased. I suggest you change the word endowed you could have said, enchanted, surprised, or amazed. I wasn’t sure what emotion you were going for.
The line: The situation may be splendid; it was very well attended. The choir blended very well when the speaking cloud had a render thought about how it tended to make someone feel cheerful, instead of being tearful I suggest to use another word to replace render
Perhaps random thought?
Thank you for sharing a very uplifting poem.
Sue.

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