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Just Visiting  [ASR]
A woman goes to visit her daughter and meets up with a frightening stranger.
by Carol, Bride of Writingstein
Review of Just Visiting  
Review by Beholden
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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And from me too!

You're good at these Just Dialogue things, aren't you? I've read a few now and they're all very natural, unforced, and tell some surprisingly complex stories. Such as this one. It's very clever. I admit I began to suspect that Nathan was a ghost quite early on, but it really doesn't matter. The real surprise was in the mother's relationship to Nathan and you kept that until the last line. Excellent timing.

Everything flows very smoothly and the characters react just as we imagine they would. The result is a story that rolls out before us like a red carpet, inviting us to travel further in. It really is expertly done.

But you present me with a problem. I am using these reviews for other contests as well, and for one I'm required to make suggestions for improvement to the piece being reviewed. And you leave me with nothing to say. It's not a big deal to me because I still review the piece with my honest opinion but the fact remains, I'm missing out on points here!

Which is my way of saying how wonderful is this story. I really cannot find anything even slightly wrong with it. You even filled in all genre options and gave the piece an accurate title. Nothing for me to be picky about at all... *Sad*

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