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The Stuff Screams Are Made Of  [18+]
Scream and scream again
by W.D.Wilcox
Review by Beholden
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hmm, a lot of screaming in this one. Well, I can't say I wasn't warned and you certainly delivered. It's a fine tale of horror, very capably delivered. I haven't read such a blood-curdling story in a while.

You write well and clearly, not allowing the reader to wander from the point. In this way the story progresses efficiently, step by step, towards the scene of ultimate confrontation. There is perhaps a surfeit of adverbs and adjectives in this build-up, but nothing that a careful trimming won't mend.

One thought that did occur to me early on was the age of Beth. She is described as "my little sister," which gave me the image of a girl aged somewhere between eight and sixteen, but subsequent events force my guess beyond these limits. I would hazard the opinion now that she is "little" in age but not size. Could you avoid this by stating that she is the younger sister?

Finally, I found a typo! Here it is: "...on her knees before a amber pool..." A quick insertion of an "n" required there, methinks.

And that's about it, really. I can't say it's enjoyable from a personal point of view, horror not being my taste (although I seem to write a lot of it in WDC). But it's clearly an excellent representative of the genre and I applaud you, sir. Oh, and happy anniversary, of course!

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