Hello Yesmrbill,

I just read your story. "Johnny’s Little Pistol" .

The introduction peaks my interest as we see what is happening up to this point and the war is over.

Your use of words, actions, and personfication, brings this to life in a way that is unique. The derringer seems to have a mind of its own, yet really, Johnny is in charge to carry out the mission. Or is he?


I think you needed two commas here:

My owner(,) Johnny(,) stands on


Here is another area needing commas and uncap of actor.

She probably assumes that Johnny(,) the actor(,) is rehearsing lines for a different play.

Almost anyone knows if Abraham Lincolns death and circumstance, yet your story shows it in a way, without laying blame for his death.

It is an historical event but because the weapon used is personified, we see this without any bias, except for the guns point if view. That's okay, as it's a work of a combination of fiction/ realism.

I enjoyed reading this story for its artistic style.

Thanks for sharing.





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .