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Review #4710927
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 Making Lemonade WC: 289 Open in new Window. [E]
Abe and Martha's vacation is upended...if they allow it.
by jackiesmuse Author Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
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I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me!



I found this piece on Read & Review and enjoyed it a lot. It's well-written with engaging characters. The dialogue sounds natural to my ear. I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

My only suggestion is that the journey from beach to hotel could be expanded a bit. Perhaps the hardy senior citizens could be shown coping better than natives as the snow piles up. And at the end maybe they are off to search for a slope. I doubt Hawaii has Minnesota-style ski slopes. *Smile*

Overall, a good read.

Keep writing!


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