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 | Making Lemonade WC: 289  [E] Abe and Martha's vacation is upended...if they allow it.  |
| (4.5)| Disclaimer: I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me! I found this piece on Read & Review and enjoyed it a lot. It's well-written with engaging characters. The dialogue sounds natural to my ear. I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar. My only suggestion is that the journey from beach to hotel could be expanded a bit. Perhaps the hardy senior citizens could be shown coping better than natives as the snow piles up. And at the end maybe they are off to search for a slope. I doubt Hawaii has Minnesota-style ski slopes.  Overall, a good read. Keep writing! Words Whirling 'Round A poet merely pens a mirror, the reader brings the reflection.        My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/12/2023 @ 8:34pm EDT