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The Late Chrysanthemum  [13+]
My first A-Z poem - A chrysanthemum faces an unfortunate future
by winklett
Review by Beholden
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I was halfway through the poem before I noticed the alphabet thing. Serves me right for not having read the description in the first place. So it's a word game as well as a poem. And the game is very cleverly achieved, unobtrusive enough to have fooled me for a while at least.

But the poem is even better. In spite of the restraints of the game, you set out the initial idea clearly and then develop it logically and naturally, without having to twist and bend to achieve the next initial letter. It is a beautiful poem, the chrysanthemum being an inspired choice of flower, it being both extremely handsome and delicate too. And then to regard with fortitude the approaching winter and the death it represents, refusing to be defeated by the awareness of how short the time is - all this steadily developed with each line flowing into place obediently, it's a remarkable achievement. Word choice is exquisite, a veritable shower of expressive words that, at the same time, remain faithful to the driving force of reason. I am astounded at the talent and care that created this poem.

And now I am supposed to make suggestions for the piece's improvement. How ridiculous when confronted with such perfection. I can point out the lack of information in the Genres section - using all three options would ensure more readers being drawn into the feast (Nature, Experience, and Environment are possibilities, I think); and the description regarding Lady MacBeth is interesting to me but actually tells the prospective reader nothing about the poem. How about something like "A chrysanthemum faces an unfortunate future"?

I cannot fault the poem itself.

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