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 | Obsessions  [13+] A man decides to act on his feelings towards the woman he's been in love with for years.  |
| (4.0)| Hello beandon Happy 23rd Birthday! This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum" [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   What? But why? I definitely wasn't expecting that ending. Especially since it seemed like everything was going the way you wanted it to go. She was into you. So why?   Title and Description - The title definitely matches the story, and caught my attention. The description urged me to read on. Theme/Subject Matter:- Well, I don't want to give away the ending, so I won't. But it's about a man obsessed with a woman. He knows the feeling is too intense because he has had them for years. So, he gets up the nerve to finally ask her out. Characters - The main character is very intense. He questions the sanity of the depth of his emotions over a woman. Feelings that he has had for years. Originality/Creativity:- A very creative, and somewhat disturbing tale. Setting - The last scene was written detail by detail. It was easy to visualize while I read.   Emotion/Impact: - It left me questioning why. It left me sad, kind of mad, and a lot confused. My Suggestions - "we all feel Capitalize we.  neverthelessComma after nevertheless  how I truly feel. how I truly felt. I laid out the blanket, No comma needed  and laid with herand lay with her I had had been planning show her how I truly feel.to show her how I truly felt.  In need to.I need to.  Summary: Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us! KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Intuey   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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