I had to read this a few times to really, really sink into its many layers.

First thoughts: Isn't that just like a scientist? Doing something just because he can and he wants to see how it turns out? Curiosity and the cat come to mind.

Details I noticed even if you didn't mean them:

Rebekkah's name is Smithe, a social climber variation of the name "Smith" which originally indicated a profession. Rebekkah, the smith, creates the actual metal structure. Very nicely inserted detail many will miss.

Alex's surname is Lawson or perhaps "law's son"? Certainly, he was subject to laws - Murphy's Law, Time, and all the other laws of the universe.

Suggestion: The only suggestion I could make is that you add two more descriptive genres. "Other" is a terrible choice. Choose Comedy if you feel it's applicable. Is there one for irony or even "serves them right for being so smug"? I don't know them off by heart, but there must be some that fit well.

Overall Impression: I love the little twist at the end. I love the "oops" coming to mind just a little too late. I would have enjoyed the story for its creativity, imagination and the twisted ending but you added the names and made it even better.

Of course, if the universe goes according to plan, in another 13 billion years or so, Alex and Rebekkah will do it all over again. And again? It boggles the mind.




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .