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 It's Too Late  [13+]
Detective Osborn interrogates a criminal, and learns of a dark secret soon to occur
by Sum1 Is Home
Review of It's Too Late  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Disclaimer:

I may suggest changes in my review. This is not meant as 'serious' literary criticism (I’m no expert). It's merely my record of the ‘bumps’ I encounter as I travel through your words. If I'm thrown by a typo, an awkward word, or a line that doesn't scan, then it's likely that others will be as well. My intent in giving a review is to applaud your work and maybe help you to improve it. A review is merely another reference to consider. If the suggestions prove useful, then use them. If I ‘just don’t get it’, then by all means ignore me!



This is a good piece that evokes the spooky uncertainties of quantum physics that began with the Manhattan Project. There was a minority opinion that the first A-bomb test would destroy the entire world, but they went ahead anyway. This story shows what might have happened if the minority opinion had been correct.

Your story is well-written with good characters and natural dialogue. It held my interest to the end, and I enjoyed reading it.

I also picked a couple of nits, just for you! *Smile*


Here are some suggestions for your consideration:

Despite being a man of his stature, if he hadn’t known this man’s title and job description, he would have thought him to be a ‘down on his luck’ type person. His manner of dress was disheveled, his clothes didn’t match, and he looked calm, but despondent. However, he sat in the folding chair looking off to one side, eyes fixed on a distant point, as if he didn’t have a care in the world.

“No, its it's fine. I’m quite sure I won’t need one.”

Osborn read from the rap sheet arrest report

and understood a little of the experiments being conducted

In the end, he won over a deciding majority



Keep Writing!



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